Language notes (W9)

<Starry Night>

     Saturday, I went on a wonderful ecology tour in NCCU. The adventure was guided by an knowledgeable and warm-hearted teacher, Mr. Tsai, a nature-lover living near our school. Eight of us strolled around the river bank. All of a sudden, with a gleam of the flashlight, teacher found a brown tree frog, which is an protected species and was not easily found. How lucky we were! ...    

     I sincerely recommend this tour for those who want to uncover the mask of the starry night in NCCU. There will be four more this and next weekend so if you are interested in it, just sign up in the website below without hesitation. You will undoubtedly feel surprised!

https://docs.google.com/forms/d/1BZKTIBsBt14S8L6JohkW4HmXI5GujPI_I053T9J4UWY/viewform

(1) 整篇敘述精彩，用字生動，頗引人入勝。
(2) with a gleam of the flashlight：flashlight本身並不會有gleam，而是來自flashlight產生的光，故此時flashlight應改為light。
(3) ..., which was one of the protected species and could not be easily found.
  - 因為全段都是在說過去的事，應改為which was...
  - an / a 區分別忘記
  - 不容易"被"找到：couldn't be easily found

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<Music night>

      After taking the last class today, I went to Yunxiu Hall (雲岫廳) with my classmate quickly. Why? It’s because “Accounting Great Voice” took place. It is what other departments call Department Karaoke. Our department didn’t have this kind of activity before. This year, some of the sophomores decided to try it. I must say that they are super good. The atmosphere made people feel comfortable, and all players were capable. I was previously afraid there would be boring and deserted. However, it was completely not at all. When I pulled the door, what I saw and what I heard was crowded people. The feeling was so similar that it recalled my pat memories in high school. 
...They know and agree with one another in the process. In the meanwhile, they also build the bridge to make people in the department have more chances to get closer. It is really meaningful. If I have the capacity, I will give myself a chance. Not afraid of many unrealized things, just do what you want to do and enjoy it hard. May it be the common wisdom to encourage ourselves.

(1) 不能說there would be boring，應說 that event would be boring.
(2) 你應該不會「聽到」很擠的人潮吧，所以，以what I heard來連接crowded people並不適當。可改為When I pulled the door, what I saw was a hall filled with people.
(3) past 別寫錯囉。
(4) Not being afraid of ... ：Not afraid不是動詞也不是名詞，不能直接當句子的開頭。

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<Pressure makes diamonds>

After more than a month, I finally post my last blog post here. First, I have to apologize for being late on posting a new article.

Having been busy making props for the cheer leading team of my department, studying the heavy textbooks of law, and other activities…, I could hardly find a period of time for myself to think what I have done in this semester and what I am going to do in the future. I understand that claiming how busy I am is actually finding excuses for my failure of time management; however I really found it hard to finish everything handsomely before the deadline. Punctuality or refinement, I could only choose one. This seems to be a vicious circle in my daily life, and I just trying could not get rid of it.

I have heard a nice sentence says that" Pressure makes diamonds." Within three weeks, the semester will come to an end. I am starting to bring the challenges down one by one. Though it is hard, I believe by doing so, people can grow, and discover their potentiality.

(1) 如果你是要說讀「重量很重」的教科書，那可以說heavy textbooks，如果你是要說課業負擔很重，那應該改成..., studying difficult law textbooks, 就可以了。
(2) however的用法：前面分號，後面逗號，例如改為：; however, I really...
(3) 準時與優雅，可以改為elegance，refinement比較常用在純化、提煉這方面。
(4) 是要寫trying to get rid of it？ could not 是什麼意思？
(5) 有一句話說...，應改用go，例如本句修改為：... a nice sentence goes that " Pressure...."

Language notes (W7)

<Seize my youth.>

     Just in around a month, we will say goodbye to our freshman lives. It shocks me a lot that time flies. I can clearly remember how I felt when I first step in this college. And now, I am going to live here for a year. When I still can’t understand what I am doing, I must learn to grow up and face the next group freshmen. That makes me extremely afraid. I have so many things unfinished.

     I don’t know how many of you have the same feelings as mine. I ever planned for my life in the college entirely, but almost all of them weren’t realized. ...

(1) 大一生活：freshmen days / year。

(2) 當我還不知道我在做什麼：While I ...

(3) 我甚至規劃了...，但多數都未實現(尚未被實現)：I even planned ..., but most of them haven't been realized.

Language notes (W6)

<Volunteer, in Taiwan or Foreign Countries ?>

     Every time when I was not in a hurry, I would walk uphill and looked at the posters stuck on the corridor(風雨走廊) .They were reflections and records about students in NCCU who volunteered abroad. I admired their courage and spirits of devotion to people in remote areas and in fact I have made a wish to help those in need in foreign countries.

...

     After thinking for few days, I made up my mind not to sign up for the application this summer, but not just because of my friend's word. Actually, I've already join a camp which will be held for aboriginal children in Hualien. It's my first time planning lessons and activities for others and I think it's will be a challenge and I'll have a lot to learn from it. So, I decide to gain more experience this time and perhaps next year when I am more ready for international volunteering, I will go without any hesitation. 

(1) 這些poster應該不是貼在走廊上，而是貼在走廊的看板上，故可修正為：posters stuck to the bulletins along the corridor.

(2) I think it will be ...

Language notes (W5)

<Janet, the most energetic speaker I have ever seen>

...
Well….today I want to share with you about a wonderful speech I listened tonight. This speech is about Janet Hsieh’s story. She is very tall, thin, and beautiful. In addition to her beauty, she has a lot of colorful experiences which makes me really surprising! For example, she studied in MIT and wanted to be a MSF(無國界醫生), but she stopped her learning because she decided to take the job of becoming a model. The reason of her decision is that she thinks she can continue her study at the age of her fifties or even sixties, but can’t be a model when she is old. How amazing that she easily gave up her original goal and try another completely different thing. She has done many crazy things and still continues to challenge herself. When an audience asked her whether she once did something regretful, she replied that her motto is that never feel regretful about what you have done because every experience must teach you some lessons.
    I learn from her that only focusing on one thing and always having enthusiasm with everything. By the way, I like to listen to speeches because I always learn and be touched form those speakers. They give me power to have a dream.


(1) 那場我聽的演講：a speech I listened to.
(2) 讓我感到驚訝：... makes me really surprised. (surprising是用來形容事物的)
(3) 請注意時態的一致性，例如文中Janet gave up 和 tried another thing都應該是過去式。
(4) that 後接的子句應完整，不能僅有Ving(這樣好像只是個名詞)，因此可修改為：I learn from her that we should always focus on one thing while having enthusiasm for everything else.
(5) 被感動：be touched by...

Language notes (W4)

<Miss Word >

... They are going to graduate from NCCU this year. And I think what the project does for people just suits them.

... And it runs like this: first, you need to pay 100NTD to buy a special envelope with a postcard, an exclusive “Miss Word” edition UNI ball pen, and a stamp for “future mail”. Then, write down what you want to say to who you want to say to, after finishing hand-writing, just put it in to the mailbox they prepared, and in the next year(2014) you or the one you mail to will receive a postcard from 2013.

... I think it is meaningful to send a letter for people in the future, to express our feelings “in the past”. Therefore I introduce “Miss Word” to you, hope you like it.
...

(1) 第一段所提及"what the project does for people"似乎難以讓人了解，因為在第一段中並未說明這個活動的目的。故較合適的方式是改到最後段落評論時使用。

(2)寫下你所要跟某人說的：write down what you want to say to whom you want to speak with / talk to.

→ 對誰說，who應要用受詞whom

→ 跟別人說，也可以用speak with / talk with / talk to 等。

→ 這一句話跟後面的「寫完之後放入信封...等」應分兩句話，故句號。

(3) 寄信給未來的人：... send a letter to people ... ：如果寫 for，變成為未來的人寄信(例如幫未來的人請願等的目的)，不合原意。

Language notes (W3)

<An Outstanding Aerial Photographer>

(1)
we were all looking forwards to his coming.
→ look forward是一組的動詞，就類似look after(照顧)一樣，所以forward不可以加s。

(2)
He wasn’t willing to wait for two more years because he wouldn’t have enough energy and courage to do it at that time, when he is fifty years old.
a. wh- 在這裡因為僅是說他五十歲時，並非加上一個句子，因此並不用加上逗號。
b. 這段話可以考慮改寫成：He didn't want to wait for two more years because he won't have enough energy and courage at the age of fifty.

(3)
In spite of all difficulties, he is still stick to his dream now. That touches me a lot.
→堅持下去： He sticks to ...

(4)
 He takes photos for not only the beauty but also the painfulness in Taiwan. 
→照相照什麼，應該要說 He takes photo of...，若是for則變成「為...而照」


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<Making shots>

(1)
I was inspired by Robert Muraine when senior high, ...
→助教想你應該是說在高中時期吧，但助教找不到 when senior high 的用法來表示這個意思，因此應該還是要寫完整，例如 I was inspired by RM when I was in senior high,...

(2)
Few years more roll by, ...
→這裡應改為 Few more years roll by, ，因為few more是拿來講years的。

(3)
I dance to express; not to impress.
→這個結論下的真好。


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<Korea's Hapkido!A way to train your body.>

(1)
Rescently(Recently), I want(went(去哪 go-went-gone)) to a gym with my classmate, it was a very funny experience. I signed up a lesson which is about one kind of martial art that called “Hapkido” in Korea style ；the word in Chinese is called “韓式合氣道”. For what reason that I am willing to  pay people money to beat me shitting(文章中應避免) around? Maybe I just enjoy the pain, on me and on others. Anyways(Anyway), it is not the funny point, which make(makes) me feeling(feel) so funny is that we are in a Muay Thai (泰拳) gym learning Korea Hapkido and the teacher is Canadian . It let me feel like that I am a Chinese and going abroad to U.S.A to learn Chinese literature from a teacher whom from Dubai.
I know in today it is coming to being(be，to後加原形動詞) a global village. But I still will(不用will) feel strange that if a foreigner teaching me Chinese literature in my pass days. Maybe it is a warning that we should not forget our own cultures(文化是一個集合的概念，不用加s), in the future if my son or grandson’s Chinese literature teacher is a foreigner, I will be shame(ashamed) about it. We should be proud of our own cultures(不用加s), even if it may have something should improve, just improve and fix it, cultures just like animal, they are dying and bearing with the time.
Back to the martial art part, in the class I was also surprised that so many ladies like to learn this, and also feel shame(ashamed) about that those pretty ladies also can beat me down with only one hand, without joking, the Hapkido’s main point is that use the minimum strength to knock down or control your foes, so it is very suited to(suitable for) ladies whom(who) do not have much strength, maybe our teacher can learn it to deal with her husband(?????).
→小心錯字。

(2)
It let me feel like that I am a Chinese and going abroad to U.S.A to learn Chinese literature from a teacher whom from Dubai.
a. 這一段話分別由三句組成
 (a) I am a Chinese.
 (b) I go abroad to the USA to learn Chinese literature from a teacher.
 (c) The teacher is from Dubai.
 所以應該要合併成：It make me feel like that I am a Chinese going abroad to the USA to learn Chinese literature from a teacher who is from Dubai.
b. 本句不該用whom而應用who。whom 是「誰」的受詞，例如下句
 (a) Mandy is a girl.
 (b) I should call Mandy.
 所以合併成 Mandy is a girl whom I should call.
c. so it is very suited to(suitable for) ladies whom(who) do not have much strength,
→這裡也應該用who

Language notes (W2)

<Wu Pao-chun Studies EMBA>

(1)
Recently, the news about the master baker  Wu Pao-chun (吳寶春), who applied for Taiwan's EMBA (including NCCU!!)but was rejected because he didn't have a college degree, has caused lots of people's discussion. 
→也可以這樣說，The news, ..., has received lots of attention.

(2)
the high educational system should offer them some practical and related lessons to help them gain what they really want.
→高教：the higher education system

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<new language leads to a new life??>

(1)
Down there is the website of the language
→網址如下：The link is below.

(2)
Well, that is because it is the user-friendly side, the real computer world can appear just click the right side of your mouse and there will be a button that says "code" , press it and you will see the real world .
→可以試著改成這樣說，比較簡潔，原句似乎有些太直接中文翻譯了。if you want to see what the computer really reads, you can click on the button says "code"

(3)
Thats because, since google is a big corporation which contains the both client and sever part of the computer(client-server are the model that has been inherited since the computer have invented) 
→Kevin，一些小細節還是不要漏掉喔。
a. That's
b. server 伺服器
c. client-server is
d. the computer has been invented

(4)
Now, with this new language, since google is a giant in the internet world, the influence of google would be huge.
If google use its own language and solve the difficult problem, i think the internet world will change.
→仔細看這個句子有些怪怪的，
a. with this new language→ the influence of google would be huge 這二者好像沒有直接關係。
b.所以前後兩句可以合在一起，例如：Now, with this new language invented by Google, the Internet giant, some of the difficult problems will be solved and the Internet world will change.